Re: I'm working on this poem - advice?
This isn't a review site anymore so you won't get a lot of replies but I'll try to answer the question ...
I think the premise of the poem is good and I like the reference to the well known version of the road not taken and the twist that you added by putting in despair from your choice ... I think you're trying to say that although you followed a clearly marked path in your life you still ended up where you didn't want to be, lost so to speak ... By the way I think that should be amongst ...........
There are some grammaer issues, punctuation etc .. but let me ask you ... what are you doing with this? Is this part of a book? A single submission perhaps? Why the request for advice?